1st version:
My name is Ana Carolina Oliveira Ribeiro, I'm 20 years old and I am undergradute student at UFMG, where I have been studying English teaching. I'm on my 4th semester. I don't work in the area yet, but I want as soon as possible. I love to study languages and also linguistics.
I intend to travel abroad this year to improve my English skills.
Samara's sugestion:
My name is Ana Carolina Oliveira Ribeiro, I'm 20 years old and I am undergradute student at UFMG, where I have been studying English teaching. It"s my 4th semester. I don't work in the area yet, but I want as soon as possible. I love to study languages and also linguistics.
I intend to travel abroad this year to improve my English skills. You can talk more about what you expect of the course and this subject.
Bárbara's sugestion: Your biodata is very good. You gave us an idea of what you want to do, and a little of yourself. But you can say more about your expectation in the professional life.
2º > 2nd version:
My name is Ana Carolina Oliveira Ribeiro, I'm 20 years old and I am undergradute student at UFMG, where I have been studying English teaching. It"s my 4th semester and i'm really enjoying being here, at FALE. I don't work in the area yet, but I hope to do it soon. I love to study languages and also linguistics. About this course I hope it helps me to achieve excelent writing skills. I intend to travel abroad this year to improve my English skills.
Final Version:
My name is Ana Carolina Oliveira Ribeiro, I am 20 years old and I am an undergradute student at UFMG, where I have been studying English teaching.It is my 4th semester and I am really enjoying being here at FALE. I don't work in the area yet, but I hope to start soon. I love to study languages and also linguistics. In relation to this course I hope it helps me to develop excelent writing skills. I intend to travel abroad this year to improve my English.
My name is Ana Carolina Oliveira Ribeiro, I'm 20 years old and I am undergradute student at UFMG, where I have been studying English teaching. I'm on my 4th semester. I don't work in the area yet, but I want as soon as possible. I love to study languages and also linguistics.
I intend to travel abroad this year to improve my English skills.
Samara's sugestion:
My name is Ana Carolina Oliveira Ribeiro, I'm 20 years old and I am undergradute student at UFMG, where I have been studying English teaching. It"s my 4th semester. I don't work in the area yet, but I want as soon as possible. I love to study languages and also linguistics.
I intend to travel abroad this year to improve my English skills.
You can talk more about what you expect of the course and this subject.
Bárbara's sugestion:
Your biodata is very good. You gave us an idea of what you want to do, and a little of yourself. But you can say more about your expectation in the professional life.
2º > 2nd version:
My name is Ana Carolina Oliveira Ribeiro, I'm 20 years old and I am undergradute student at UFMG, where I have been studying English teaching. It"s my 4th semester and i'm really enjoying being here, at FALE. I don't work in the area yet, but I hope to do it soon. I love to study languages and also linguistics. About this course I hope it helps me to achieve excelent writing skills. I intend to travel abroad this year to improve my English skills.
Final Version:
My name is Ana Carolina Oliveira Ribeiro, I am 20 years old and I am an undergradute student at UFMG, where I have been studying English teaching.It is my 4th semester and I am really enjoying being here at FALE. I don't work in the area yet, but I hope to start soon. I love to study languages and also linguistics. In relation to this course I hope it helps me to develop excelent writing skills. I intend to travel abroad this year to improve my English.